06 April, 2012

Poetically Growing

On Day 20 the poetry challenge continued. I was to write a poem that included three related objects (e.g. water, steam, ice) or actions (e.g. walking, jogging, running). I wanted also to try my hand at a specific poetic form and selected haiku. With the Mighty Finn in mind, this is what emerged.

          The child, once sitting,
          Eager to reach by standing,
          Like wind, now runs free.

It doesn't feel right to me. I want to add a few syllables, but that would take it out of the haiku form, perhaps. When I revisit it in the future, I'll revise it with a mind toward free verse. I do like the concept that is developing.